The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Where a person is born and raised can have a myriad impact to grow as an individual. Luxuries and privileges can help or ruin a person’s ability of grow as a strong individual. There’s a vast chance of debate over how luxury and privilege can make a significant impact in a person’s life but I think there must have a balance letting luxury ruin a person’s potential and making oneself a strong individual.
First and foremost, those who get privileges tend to understand and value anything that they get. As there’s no struggle to achieve something, one can easily take this life for granted. This practice can mar one’s potential to be an independent individual. A privileged person knows that there’s someone or something that can always take him/her out from any problems, they don’t feel the urge to become a strong person of their own. On the contrary, a not so privileged person has to struggle to achieve anything in life and this practice make him/her value one’s life.
Furthermore, to become a strong independent individual one has to work hard to gain for something he/she has cherished for long. In this process, success doesn’t come easily which will make a person to be more patient as well as strong. Moreover, by fighting his/her own problem a person will become mentally strong which will make him confident in the long run. Having luxury always makes a person remember that he/she has some backup so a person can always cede anything without even trying.
On the contrary, having luxuries and privileges can give him enough confident to take any risk in life. Having a head start can bolster one’s will to achieve something greater in life. For example, world’s fifth richest person Mukesh Ambani make an emperor with his hard work and talent. But he was from a well established family. He took his father’s business to a whole new level that now he and his brother is one of the richest men in India. So having luxury can make a strong personality.
Lastly, balancing with what we have and how to exploit the resources can make a person or damage one’s personality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...erson or damage one's personality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, moreover, so, well, as to, for example, i think, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9696969697 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86237959004 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479338842975 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4828081578 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9473684211 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105332450887 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460360548316 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356625736086 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0649908139212 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332341352141 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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