A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
As the culture difference among different regions in the same nation becomes slighter, there has been a heated discussion about whether students in a nation should take the same course before their college life starts. While requesting all the students take the same course could guarantee that they all take a uniform college entrance exam, which promises equality, I still think that we need to consider more realistic circumstances.
To begin with, if a nation require all of its students to have the same national curriculum, then a countrywide college entrance exam can be held because all the students are supposed to gain the same amount of knowledge before college. Currently, in most of the nations, especially some developing countries such as China. The chance to enter a famous university (e.g. Peking University) varies a lot for students in different province. For example, in Shandong Province, you need to rank top 100 in a total amount of 300000 students in Gaokao to be admitted by Peking University. However, in Beijing, the number is 1000 in a total number of 40000 students. Obviously, if you grow up in Shandong, then it is much harder for you to get offer from those top university. The reason why this difference persists is that students in Shandong and Beijing use different textbook. Thus, if students in China learn the same knowledge during their high school, then the country will be able to provide a nationwide uniform exam.
However, this suggestion is undermined by the fact that different students may have different background, that is, their families' financial situation varies. Consider the situation where music class is obliged in the whole country. To learn music well, you need to have your own instruments to practice at home. However, due to poverty, some families may not be able to afford one. In addition, students deserve some freedom on their course selection. It is widely accepted that different people have diverse talent and interest. For instance, generally, boys are more sensitive to numbers while girls have more sensitivity to letters and words. And if you make it compulsory for a student who is interested in physics to study music, he might complain a lot in the end. Therefore, it is obviously not suggested to require students take the same course.
In my opinion, except for some fundamental course like Math, English, educators should make other courses optional. Students should be allowed to choose the courses they are interested in. As the saying goes "Interest is the best teacher". In this way, students can learn what they want to learn and their learning passion would be stimulated.
To sum up, even though requesting all the students to study the same curriculum could bring a fairer competition opportunity to students in different area, the availability of this recommendation and its efficacy still needs further analysis. A better suggestion would be making some non-fundamental courses optional.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 803, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested requiring'.
Suggestion: suggested requiring
...the end. Therefore, it is obviously not suggested to require students take the same course. In my...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
e.g., however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, except for, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2512.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16872427984 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81441469493 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520576131687 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.3735229684 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.48 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.44 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264783412191 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630942679532 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637518989755 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140677624131 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539068121077 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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