I slightly disagree with the recommendation. Under some kinds of cicurstances, national curriculum might be advantageous. Yet, most of the time this is not the case.
National curriculum might be helpful when we have a diverse and well-thought team to design the curriculum. If there's this kind of team in government, they can, for example, design a curriculum that instruct students to respect and even take advantages of diversity. They can also inform students what is needed to know as a well-prepared citizen in civil society. And the curriculum can provide some fundamental training that is needed in all kinds of profession, like the subjects we take in GRE general test. With this kind of diverse and well-prepared team, we can make sure every kinds of minority are not suppressed or ignored in the curriculum, and we can also get what is truly needed universally in all kinds of position in society.
However, most of the time this kind of diverse and well-thought team is not available. In most nation, there are certain groups of people taking the dominant position in society. When designing this kind of national curriculum, most likely only the views from these dominant classes will be considered. For example, in a society dominated by male, the perspective and experience of female might be totally ignored. Under this kind of situation, the world-view shaped by this curriculum will be narrow. Holding this kind of world-view, students might not know how to care about or communicate with minority group, which
For example, in the nation I grown, there's no a strict national curriculum but a guideline that require all schools to follow. This guideline is mostly designed by those who have power in society, that is, well-educated and most likely heterosexual. The experience of gender minority is mostly ignored in this guideline. Some of my friends who happened to belong to gender or sexual orientation minority have some miserable experiences in school. They suffered from the ignorant or even harmful bahaviors from peers, which might partly result from the curriculum that didn't consider about minority.
To conclude, I believe in some almost utopian cases, national curriculum might be helpful for a society as a whole. However, most of the time this is not the case, due to the present power structure in society. Thus, considering how unlikely in probability that this kind of curriculum will be helpful, I disagree with the recommendation.
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 54
- Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely alig 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14603960396 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93866302399 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445544554455 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6200530014 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166571314443 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05859848106 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613653428821 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107831063949 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233243905076 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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