As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to
think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Undoubtedly, our modern life is much more complicated than the past. this is obvious that noweday human depend on camputers, internet, robots and cell phones to solve their problems. Although we all use technology and this help us to have a comfortble life, is this mean that we gradually loose our ability to thinking and solving? In my point of view, I do not think so. I feel that way because of following reasons.
First of all, human have made this instruments such as camputers and robots to get high production which was impossible in hand working jobs. There is no doubt that invention of camputer needed to prepare to solve a lot of obstacles and hard works combined with curiasity and high level knowledge. Thus, how we can say using this products for problem solving will reduce our ability of thinking. For example we use calculators and this help us to calculate faster than the past but we all know how to calculate without calculator even we need more time for doing this. i remember when I took national entery exam for master degree there was a policy that we could not use calculatore. Although I always use calculator, I was able to solve problems by myself. So human ability never lust because of using a device which is invented by human. This device just help us to solve facing problems faster.
Second, technology solve our mathematical and theorichal problems but we can use this tools for solving problems releated with human emotion and interactions. For instence, if a person have problem with his or her boss the technology is not a good option for problem solving so he or she needs another aspects of human ability which is related with thinking, learning and communicatin. I had a lot of problem with my brother and I really wanted to have a good relationship with him so when I was think to soleve our problem I need to improve my behavior and have a excellent communication skills. I got good result because of thinking about my situation and I did not use any technology so we do not need this tools for every aspect of life.
Third, technolgy can help us to improve our knowledge and other abilities. for example we all use google searching for getting information. we all need internet for learning and reading new information. So, internet help us to get better thinking and problem solving abilities.
All in all, Bas
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: This
...is much more complicated than the past. this is obvious that noweday human depend on...
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...le life, is this mean that we gradually loose our ability to thinking and solving? In...
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...l knowledge. Thus, how we can say using this products for problem solving will reduc...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of problems'.
Suggestion: a lot of problems
...nking, learning and communicatin. I had a lot of problem with my brother and I really wanted to ...
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...ood relationship with him so when I was think to soleve our problem I need to improve...
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...rove our knowledge and other abilities. for example we all use google searching for...
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...ogle searching for getting information. we all need internet for learning and read...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, third, thus, for example, i feel, no doubt, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72222222222 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67098758137 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495169082126 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.2346048257 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8636363636 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252480563149 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815374228632 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592342313156 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16564321113 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396463617941 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.