As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to
think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Advancement in today's technology has changed lifestyle of everyone. We all are dependent on technology so much that we are not able to even survive a day in office or home without it. In my opinion, we all are so much dependent on technology that our ability to think and work hard which we used to has reduced.
In 1900's there wasn't much advancement in technology so most of the work done by people was without machines and there were more job opportunities for everyone. But as we all started moving forward so did the progress in research and development of machines. Humans were replaced by machines that were introduced in factories. Job opportunities were reduced for people and families were getting affected. Technology advancement has not only reduced human's efficiency to work but also taken their place in a working society.
Technology is present in every part of our life. In fact our social lives too are dependent on them. If we take time to think about our social involvement its minimal without our mobile phones. Surviving strategy of our life is dependent on technology. In our professional life most of our work is done on laptops. From biggest to smallest companies or organization select employees according to their skills of using computers and technology rather than their intelligence and hard work. Human's ability to think is totally deteriorated by this as they spend less time thinking and more time on learning how to use new tech devices. Students working in school are using calculator even for minute calculations. It's not only affecting their education but also their social life. According to New York Times data involvement of students in sports has reduced drastically due to mobile phones and video games.
Of course, some argue that technology advancements have made everyone's life easier. But then why is it used at such a level that it's deteriorating our thinking and has reduced human value at such an extent that we are of no productive use without it. Increasing dependency on such a thing will only lessen our abilities to think which has been the most important feature in humans that has got us so far.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'have'.
Suggestion: have
...to think and work hard which we used to has reduced. In 1900s there wasnt m...
^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'In the 1900s'.
Suggestion: In the 1900s
...d which we used to has reduced. In 1900s there wasnt much advancement in technol...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... to has reduced. In 1900s there wasnt much advancement in technology so most ...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...social lives too are dependent on them. If we take time to think about our social ...
^^
Line 13, column 329, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the smallest'.
Suggestion: to the smallest
...r work is done on laptops. From biggest to smallest companies or organization select employ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 130, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...hen why is it used at such a level that its deteriorating our thinking and has redu...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, in fact, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96438356164 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78839780508 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501369863014 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6399326821 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2857142857 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7619047619 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136599161914 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042336151486 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042992123913 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880987567092 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315470187646 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.