People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
It is a general trend that people are influenced by their surroundings and happenings around them. The prompt specifies that the human behavior is more influenced by forces rather than by personal interests. I my opinion, I mostly agree with the fact that external factors play a significant role in shaping a person's character.
Primarily, the competition in this modern era is so dramatic that people often compete with their fellow workers or classmates to come out as the best. In such a situation the primary concern shifts to acquire praise and benefits rather than focusing on one's real talents. For example, a school were students are primarily evaluated on basis of their academic intelligence tend to neglect the talents in music composition or sand art. The concern for gaining marks to excel in class shifts the extraordinary talents to avoid them for so long. The impacts of such instances are seen from the increased number of students taking a gap year after schooling to identify their real interests. Such instances force us to believe that the environment one belongs to influence the process of evolution of one's personality.
Another factor that have effect on the growth of a human is the financial condition in which one lives. A person born to an elite family will always have an ease in getting the resources sufficient for his development. Whereas the one in a detrimental state will strive to acquire atleast education and food. Such conditions will affect them during getting a job one dream for. An example is seen where students with lower ranks getting medical admits by paying high fees whereas the lower income students have to excel in their academic performances which is still in a pathetic state. Thus the financial stability of an individual have a significant effect on one's development.
Further, the environment where one lives in also influences a persons behavior. A child growing with separated parents and the one who experiences the love and care of a family have entirely different perspectives on life. Many psychologists always prescribe a warm, friendly and affable environments as a cure to treat mental stresses. The increased trend towards yoga, meditation, and mental relaxation techniques supports the need for a calm environment for a clear and efficient working of mind.
Thus there are a variety of physical, mental, psychological and environmental factors that influence the shaping of a persons behavior. Anyone provided with suitable conditions for one's development will surely excel in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...sonal interests. I my opinion, I mostly agree with the fact that external factors play a significant rol...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...rs play a significant role in shaping a persons character. Primarily, the competitio...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...o influence the process of evolution of ones personality. Another factor that hav...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ces which is still in a pathetic state. Thus the financial stability of an individua...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...nt where one lives in also influences a persons behavior. A child growing with separate...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... warm, friendly and affable environments as a cure to treat mental stresses. The ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...clear and efficient working of mind. Thus there are a variety of physical, mental...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...factors that influence the shaping of a persons behavior. Anyone provided with suitable...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e provided with suitable conditions for ones development will surely excel in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, thus, whereas, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18072289157 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8843625126 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2040686997 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.380952381 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2380952381 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0947518685053 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305036493649 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417780192057 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0602904083009 0.150359130593 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460791751161 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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