Everyone would be aware of the old adage 'We are what the circumstances make of us', and this saying is a good fit for the criminal scenario as well. When people commit crimes intentionally, there are certain driven forces and motives which compells them to do so, and before the government should resort to any harsh actions, the intensity of the crime as well as the intentions of the criminal should be analysed. In a good law system, the punishment is commensurate with the crime one has committed. Hence, it would be too extreme to withdraw civil rights or take away the right of benefit from labour from every single criminal.
To elucidate this further, an example of the same can be analysed. On one hand there could be a driver who has broken the traffic signal, and on the other a burglar who pointed his gun and stole millions from a bank. Both these people have broken a social contract, and are subject to punishment. But is the severity of both the crimes same? In the Suadi Arabia, criminals who have been proven as rapists are paraded in the city streets in front of the public, and eventually their genitals are cut off as a punishment for their inhumane crime. It is believed that this is a good way to treat them right, and also make the public aware about the strictness in certain areas of the system. While this system does evoke a sense of fear amongst the citizens, some may contend that this could be an extreme manner of tackling issues. I believe it is right to say that a just law system should judge the punishment based on it's severity, and decide the punishment appropriately.
Additionally, there are cases where a father might steal food to help his family survive, while a young teenager might commit a crime without being completely aware of the law. These scenarios lead to issues which should be tackled by a different area of the government. Stealing is definitely wrong, but cases like these show how the government is lacking in proving even a basic necessity to some, or how there isn't social awareness of certian laws which inadverdently makes children commit juvenile crimes.
Secondly, as human beings, we always have the scope of improvement. Even some criminals with intense charges of rape and murder sometimes come out of prison as changed souls. They work, socialise, go out and earn money to sustain, and begin their lives from scratch again. As their punishment, some need to work in social organisations like orphanages, hospitals, NGOs while some also contribute in manual labour work to assist with construction. These activities help them stay connected with the real world, act as ray of hope that life after prison may exists and most importantly, assist in realising their wrongdoings and in a way makes them give back to the society. Thus a law which takes away all the rights of a person after commiting a single crime is far from being fair.
To conclude, I would highlight the importance of having just laws, which study the details of the crime- age, intensity, motives etc. before setting the punishment for the criminal. Also, if the policies seem appropriate, criminals should be given the opportunity to redress their doings. Like it is said, we all deserve a second chance, right?
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- Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance. 94
- Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling r 66
- Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, even so, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2696.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 563.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78863232682 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59615399873 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53108348135 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 848.7 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5281334061 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.84 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.52 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223949492119 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572862473159 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608408720364 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118896309229 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505476046505 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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