Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no
speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Events that lead to a major blow to a nation or the world is unwanted by everyone on the macro level. But deep down they help us to better equip ourselves and be ready if a similar situation arises in the future. If reformers or speakers just keep proposing ideas and solutions without a solid example, very few people might pay attention to it. Solid examples are necessary. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the suggestion presented for two reasons.
As one can always say that 'education' is one of the pillars of a strong and developed economy, it may sometimes develop cracks in it. And, the nation as a whole - government and the citizens have to bare its price. A scandal in the field of education can surely have long-lasting impacts on the entire country. For example, if a plot involving dishonest exam setters who might leak out the question papers before the exam to students who can pay them large amounts of money can result into snatching away fair education from deserving candidates. A candidate who might have put in 50 hours to prepare for the exam might score lower than his/her counterpart who just paid some amount of money and got the exam paper the night before the exam. This is a major event which will surely lead to outrage in the students and parents as well. As a result, the government will be forced into taking actions against such people and pass laws which will prevent such things from happening in the future. Just because such an event happened the government would pass necessary laws. If a mere champion of placing every aspect of education under scrutiny would have held talks on this topic without an example, probably the people and the government would pay no heed to him. Thus, a scandal which leads to something unfair can draw the attention of the entire world to it and this may result in its prevention in the future.
Industrial Scandals are not uncommon. Factories sometimes ease out on safety measures just to increase their profit but they do not think about the degradation of the local as well as the global environment in the long run. One such example is the event or one may call it an 'Industrial Scandal' of Bhopal Gas Tragedy. The tragedy that killed thousands of local citizens of Bhopal, India. Various documentaries cite various reasons which led to this event of letting out huge amounts of poisonous gas into the air. But the majority of the investigations point towards pure negligence of that factory. Similarly in this case also, many environmentalists protested the presence of such a hazardous factory in the middle of the town, but no solid actions were taken until the tragedy happened. Because of this event, the locals and the national government were forced to take actions and as a result, the factory was shut down. Hence, we can see that solid events are necessary to open the eyes of the people.
Some might say, scandals can often lead to loss of life and property and they are completely unnecessary events in history. But man is an animal who believes in what he sees more than in what he hears. Thus, if a scandal takes place, the people get familiarized with the events which they may have never thought of. And thus, will be forced to take correct steps right from the start the next time the same situation arises. 'Scandals should never occur' - is a statement that has no grounds. Events that open the eyes of people and government are sometimes necessary as this can lead to a proper practice of the proverb - 'Prevention is better than Cure' in the coming future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 601, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...owards pure negligence of that factory. Similarly in this case also, many environmentalis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, similarly, so, thus, well, for example, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2931.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 625.0 442.535393258 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6896 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48794152597 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 930.6 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1390430875 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 5.13820224719 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0969316299099 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279765499253 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301302874572 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653129663412 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141525002775 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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