Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
One day we open our news app or switch on the television and it is all over the news! A scandal in so and so place by so and so person/people/company with dramatic outcomes having so and so effects. It sure is to catch all our attention and focus it towards the problem at hand, yet, that is all scandals do – get our attention for an infinitesimal amount of time before the next big thing or the next shiniest thing or the next mind-blowing thing captures our attention. I disagree with the statement that scandals are the best way to bring problems to our attention and that other ways to do so are not as effective.
Scandals are indeed useful to get a majority population’s attention in a swift and easy manner, yet their impact is short-lived. Once the major media channels stop talking about the scandal, it along with the problems and damages it has caused, eventually dies out. People are in fact triggered or outraged by the issues that each scandal brings to the table, yet before we can do something to tackle these issues, before we can even begin to outline a sensible game-plan, the media brings to our attention a brand new issue and all but the few sensible ones go behind it like a kitten that follows a laser light mindlessly.
When an issue is brought to light by a speaker or a reformer, it is usually not because he/she wants to take the spotlight for a while, voice out their opinions and move on with their lives like nothing happened at all. In fact, the ones who want to voice out issues are ones most deeply affected by it or strongly believe that a change should be brought about. One such incident happened in India in 2014 just around the time of the general elections. A well-learned man from the capital city of Delhi, Anna Hazare, began to voice out his opinions against corruption and bribery that was very much prevalent in the country even amongst the politicians and dignitaries. He constantly conducted campaigns by bringing together the Indian youth to bring to the country’s attention why corruption is so commonplace and questioned the people’s indifferent attitude towards it. This too like many scandals was at the forefront of every news channel and newspaper. Yet, unlike many other scandals, this didn’t die out. Anna Hazare refused to give up his campaign to end corruption until a significant change was brought about. This went on for many months and when it was time for the general elections, majority of the Indian population finally came to realize that a change in government was needed.
This isn’t to say that scandals are all together pointless and all they do is hold our attention only for a short period. There was the Unilever scandal of 2009 in a South-Indian town called Kodaikanal where the multinational company Unilever had appropriated the land of several of its employees and also released untreated lead into the atmosphere turning a deaf ear to environmental regulations. This was indeed tackled with the help of several media channels and public support. However, for a society to entirely rely on scandals and enticing news pieces to be flashed before their eyes before they wake up to the issues around them would be a loss for humanity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e ones who want to voice out issues are ones most deeply affected by it or strongly ...
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Line 7, column 621, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding issues'?
Suggestion: the surrounding issues
...efore their eyes before they wake up to the issues around them would be a loss for humanity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, well, while, in fact, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 562.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7793594306 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8076262054 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508896797153 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 844.2 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.450631435 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.368421053 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5789473684 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13412562814 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443622018531 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490096414526 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878861311963 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386016425194 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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