Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Without a bit of doubt, the award has a specific place in children raising, which is the most decisive factor in the kid's future personality. While some people believe that every single high mark from children should attain a prize, another thinks it is unnecessary or even harmful to their long-time behavior. In my view, give an award for each high mark is not appropriate because of two reasons. First, providing money for each high score can finally affect children's mental health and motivation; it may harm a child's intrinsic motivation, determining whether an action is eternal or provisional. Although giving money as a reward for every high grade establishes behavior that does not exist from the beginning, to continue what is already available, internal motivation is needed. Imagine a child who gives money after every high mark, and his parents have to go a mission or travel, or due to some unknown reasons, it is not possible to encourage their children immediately by money or other things as rewards, and then guess what happened? A child whose efforts to get high scores to depend on prizes probably experiences a significant decrease in grades and regress, leading to feeling down, anxiety, or other mental problems. We can see its necessary to teach children to love what they do by their heart without dependency on external reasoning such as money or any specific prize.
On the other hand, if children can not predict when they will achieve a commendation, they will probably work harder; this is already a discussed fact in psychology literature, unpredictable or periodic, better than giving it in a regular estate. Because it is not stable and they don't know the big prize when coming in all tasks, they try to be their best. For instance, when I was a primary school, my father told me he decides to buy me a doll based on my final exams, but he didn't tell me I have to get how many high scores, on that year. He gave me a single prize, but it made me feel excited about all my scores and do my best. If the rewards are predictable, maybe it's not exciting enough to drive me to attain high grades on every task. It is better to give just a single award and employ a child's mind with success every single moment. Finally, I assume that providing money for every high score is unnecessary, but it is a threat to children's mental health and regular prize because its nature predictably couldn't offer enough.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, so, then, while, for instance, such as, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71126760563 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59935058531 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549295774648 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.5388321995 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.97078651685 40% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25894093145 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825426284968 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421260163073 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196164117812 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604075576881 0.0667264976115 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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