Some people believe that success in creative fields, such as painting, fiction writing, and filmmaking, primarily requires hard work and perseverance. Others believe that such success mainly requires innate talents that cannot be learned.
People have different views on whether or not individuals need to have innate talents to become successful in creative fields, such as painting, fiction writing, and filmmaking. I believe that for being successful in any field a combination of different factors, including hard work, perseverance, determination, good training and talent is needed.
I can understand people who believe that success in creative contexts mainly needs natural talent. In the world, we know many famous people in art fields, such as Leonardo da Vinci in painting, Daniel steal in fiction writing (English writer) and Asghar Farhadi in filmmaking (Iranian director). All of these people were or are famous in their own right. When you look at their background and their life, you can see that these people started to do these fields because their parents discovered their talents in such fields. Leonardo was a person who was able to draw some wonderful paintings from an early age. In other words, what made him stand out from his peers was his inherent talent for painting. In another case, having good writing and a creative mind in the creation of attractive stories differentiated Daniel from other children in her time. It is a fact that having a natural talent can be a good point or luck for being successful in any field. Working in one field is neither attractive nor productive if someone does not have any talent.
However, most of the time we can see that even some talented people are not very successful, as they do not try enough and do not know how to exploit or develop their talent. Sometimes individuals only need to have enough determination, perseverance and effort to become successful. This means that in some fields, having talent can be learnt. For example, Asghar Farhadi was rejected by different directors in cinema for training because they believed that he did not have talent in filmmaking. However, he did not give up, he went to universities in foreign countries in order to learn about filmmaking and after several years, he became one of the famous directors and overcame his rivals in this field.
In conclusion, I believe that for being successful, having talent and perseverance and effort are necessary. People cannot be successful by having any factor mentioned alone. The combination of them is important.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different views on whether or not individuals need to have innate talents...
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Line 2, column 201, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Daniel) must be used with a third-person verb: 'steals'.
Suggestion: steals
...s Leonardo da Vinci in painting, Daniel steal in fiction writing English writer and A...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, even so, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01550387597 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72797246271 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503875968992 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8185071686 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.157894737 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323466080359 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100732082383 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703138345567 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220441336761 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696008052054 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different views on whether or not individuals need to have innate talents...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 201, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Daniel) must be used with a third-person verb: 'steals'.
Suggestion: steals
...s Leonardo da Vinci in painting, Daniel steal in fiction writing English writer and A...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, even so, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01550387597 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72797246271 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503875968992 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8185071686 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.157894737 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323466080359 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100732082383 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703138345567 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220441336761 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696008052054 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.