The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee — a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
The argument mentioned above shows a recommendation from the personal director to the president of Acme's publishing company. The recommendation is related to taking a speed-reading course for increasing the productivity of employees. The director has said that many companies have used these courses and they have gained some positive results. Also, he mentions that the price of these classes is low and it would be beneficial for Acme to use these courses for its employees. I believe that there are not enough persuasive reasons for taking these courses and the recommendation had been stronger if the director would have more evaluations and comparisons about the courses and the features of Acme company and other companies.
The recommendation has some weaknesses that should be considered and answered. Based on the first claim, in some companies, the such course has improved the employees ‘productivity. Some questions should be explained. Whether or not the background of other companies is the same as Acme company. Does Acme company need such skills for its employees as much as other companies? How comparable the needs and aims of other companies are with the Acme company? Some companies may benefit from this course because of some related needs that they have. In other words, the productivity of other companies may depend on the speed-reading of employees.
In the suggestion above, the personnel director has pointed out two successful graduates of this course. The problem is whether or not these samples have been chosen randomly or intentionally. The number of samples is not a good indication to prove the superiority of the course. There should be more random cases. There is no evidence to prove that the level or skill of the person who can read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours before the course was low and only with the such course has improved. Also, in the second case, do other factors have no affect the promotion of a person to become vice president of his company? The person may before be participating in the course have tried to get promoted and accidentally during this course have gained such promotion. The ambiguities of these cases should be checked and resolved.
The expenditure of the course for each person is $500, the personnel director believes that compared to the benefits the cost of the course is low. If the company wants to pay, this cost in comparison to other running costs might be reasonable. But if employees have to pay, this cost may not be affordable to all of them and also according to their duties spending money on such course might be a waste of money because it does not have any benefits for them. Also, the options mentioned for the course may not be acceptable and satisfying to all employees.
Finally, the employees must not be required to attend the course. Participation in the course should be optional because compulsory courses can be counterproductive.
In conclusion, the recommendation of the director has to be checked more. According to his argument, we cannot say exactly whether or not the speed-reading course is beneficial to Acme company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...creasing the productivity of employees. The director has said that many companies h...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...ty. Some questions should be explained. Whether or not the background of other companies is th...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...raduates of this course. The problem is whether or not these samples have been chosen randomly...
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...ses should be checked and resolved. The expenditure of the course for each pers...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... to his argument, we cannot say exactly whether or not the speed-reading course is beneficial ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, as to, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 521.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06333973129 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97164067156 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410748560461 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2718250747 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9655172414 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9655172414 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89655172414 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370948435004 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107036611412 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803106387704 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196126994328 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101997088381 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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