Some people believe that success in creative fields, such as painting, fiction writing, and filmmaking, primarily requires hard work and perseverance. Others believe that such success mainly requires innate talents that cannot be learned.
People have different views on whether or not individuals need to have innate talents to become successful in creative fields, such as painting, fiction writing, and filmmaking. I believe that for being successful in any field a combination of different factors, including hard work, perseverance, determination, good training and talent is needed.
I can understand people who believe that success in creative contexts mainly needs natural talent. In the world, we know many famous people in art fields, such as Leonardo da Vinci in painting, Daniel Steel in fiction writing (American writer) and Asghar Farhadi in filmmaking (Iranian director). All of these people were or are famous in their own right. When you look at their background and their life, you can see that these people started to do these activities because their talent was discovered in such fields when they were very young. Leonardo was a person who was able to draw some wonderful paintings from an early age. In other words, what made him stand out from his peers was his inherent talent in painting, and as he grew up, his talent also expanded to such an extent nobody was able to compete with him. Even, in the modern world, it is rare to find someone with the painting skills of Leonardo da Vinci. In another case, having good writing alongside a creative mind in the creation of attractive stories was something that differentiated Daniel from other children in her time. It is a fact that having a natural talent can be a good point or luck for being successful in any field. Working in one field is neither attractive nor productive if someone does not have any talent. There are many writers in the world but Daniel naturally knows how to write so that her fans or readers can understand what she has written.
However, most of the time we can see that even some talented people are not very successful, as they not only do not try enough to gain their aims but also do not know how to exploit or develop their talent. Sometimes individuals only need to have enough determination, perseverance and effort to become successful. This means that in some fields, having talent can be learnt. For example, Asghar Farhadi was rejected by different veterans in cinema for training because they believed that he did not have talent in filmmaking. However, he did not give up, he went to universities in foreign countries in order to learn about filmmaking and after several years, he became one of the famous directors and overcame his rivals in this field. Shakira was someone who was teased for her shrill voice when she was in high school but she did not pay attention. She tried and worked hard to become a famous singer. She is now one of the most popular and famous international singers. She learned how to control and balance her voice. Some people have a good voice but they are not good singers because they do not know how to sing properly. As a result, only having natural talent does not work alone.
In conclusion, I believe that for being successful, having talent and perseverance and effort are necessary. People have no choice but to have a combination of the factors mentioned above for being successful. Also, the item of interest can also have an impact on success in addition to the factors mentioned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different views on whether or not individuals need to have innate talents...
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Line 3, column 977, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...pular and famous international singers. She learned how to control and balance her ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, even so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2727.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 570.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78421052632 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56935140374 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450877192982 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2733542833 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269064208874 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782223631381 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643491968579 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19204894953 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805623743876 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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