The speaker asserts that as long as goal is worthy, any means taken to attain it are justifiable. Indeed, stopping at nothing to get anything can help us fulfill some purposes. However, if any means taken to attain goal are extreme, it has negative influence on society and individuals even though the goal is worthy. There are three kinds of fields, including economic, political, and entertainment fields, can reflect the negative effect. In my point of view, I strongly disagree with the speaker.
To begin with, in the economic fields, any means taken to attain goal will cause economic recession. It is common that companies want to earn more profit, which is worthy goal to them, but if they do not stop at nothing to get what they want, they will cause social conflicts and economic disorder. Unfair competition can be an example. Since unfair competition cause economic injury to a business through deceptive or wrong business practices, it will lead to economic disorder. In sum, stopping at nothing to get anything will harm the economy.
Secondly, in the political area, stopping at nothing to get anything will induce political disorder. To many politicians, becoming a president is their final and worthy goal. However, when they stop at nothing to get what they want in order to be a president, they cause social disorder. Africa conflict is an example. For own interest, Africa’s leaders star many wars in Africa without minding victims. In a word, in the political area, if leaders stop at nothing to achieve the goal, it will lead to social disorder.
Finally, in the entertainment fields, any means taken to attain goal will result unfair competition. To actors, wanting to be famous is reasonable goal, which is worthy to them. However, if they stop at nothing to obtain the goal, it may cause improper things to happen. Unspoken rules in Korea can be an illustration. In Korea, because many actresses want to be famous, they stop at nothing to attain their goal; And in order to get opportunity of plays, they slept with director. As a result, many actresses commit a suicide, since such insult are unbearable. In brief, if people stop at nothing to attain the goal, it is necessary to happen some improper things, even impairing themselves.
To sum up, in economic, political, and entertainment fields, any means taken to attain goal will cause a negative effect on society and individuals. Therefore, I totally disagree with what the speaker says.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in brief, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96987951807 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68320583537 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463855421687 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.38483146067 342% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9015512839 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320766341349 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107526233467 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089890331513 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222087175941 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589816536362 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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