Many years before in the past, the biggest decisions were made by older member of family. Nowadays, everyone tries to make strong decisions by her/himself which can bring huge alteration in their life in everywhere of world. young people extremely enthusiastic to be engage in making decision that are really necessary for their prosperous and comfortable life. Some factor that coerce and compel youth’s individuals to make decision by them self is awareness of laws with knowledge as well as changing in demands and circumstance of life oblige young’s to be a good decision maker. in my perspective view, in the following discussing, I would like to address some reasons to agree with statement.
One reason that come in my mind is knowledge and experience which significant for youths to decide for special issues. in past years, there was a bad tradition and custom that all big decisions were made by preside of family, they did not allow young to decide even issues which were belongs to them like marriage, selection of career and faculty. in addition, director of family acted aggressively and brutally without any heed to ideas and thoughts of youths. In fact, education can bring a tremendous opportunity for young to think and make decision in special field. So, educated youths attempt to use their tricks and technics for making strong decision which obtained from now technologies and experiences as well as youths use their thoughts and ideas to prove their own abilities. Moreover, up to now some advice and decision of old people admirable and practicable So, education and using experiences of family and friends can assist in decision making.
Second reason which commonly have seen between adolescents changing in demands in order to make decision for modern life and some rivalries among wealthy and destitute families. Because Youths always compare their life with neighbors and concentrate on weakness of their family and searching several ways how to decide to reach a comfortable, delightful and pleasurable life. youths always struggle with challenges to find solution for their necessities and some important requirements such as: preparation of new cloths, enough allowance for sightseeing and misspend money with their alter ago. lacks of above facilities and increasing level of life, compel young to mediate and ponder for making a grade decision progressively. In current situations, youth do not pay attention to decision and advice of family because circumstance changed and all youths have many immense dreams and wishes which require special decision making by themselves. Mentioned dreams would not accept by older and pessimistic people. Whereas, young prefer to decide by themselves in all aspects of life which rely on prosperous and modern life like putting on new clothes, getting marriage with selected girl, and choosing career to be useful for its owner.
From all reasons above, I can strongly have a conclusion that in nowadays life, young can decide for their personal life, they would participate in many big plans eagerly and enthusiastically. I am optimistic that teenager can decide to bring dramatic change in their life by their knowledge and others experiences. on the other hand, heed to sayings and deeds of old people also useful for them so, if they decide accurately, they will bring a better and tranquil life which has a bright future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, well, whereas, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2857.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19454545455 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75323941435 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498181818182 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 891.9 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6533562039 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.047619048 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1904761905 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0492455986363 0.243740707755 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0193634823237 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378546620659 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0430069678707 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484646723814 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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