The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
The definition of a great nation can be varied depending on the arbitrary standards of individuals. However, it is clear to see why the achievement of the rulers, artist, or scienties are the surest indicator of a great nation. I would like to define the great nation as the country where can bring positive benefits to other countries. In this essay, I will argue why the achievements of elites are a more reliable indicator of a great nation.
Admittedly, the welfare of people is a good indicator of the level of democracy in the country. When a nation provides a social service such as tuition fee for tertiary education, generic health insurance, and long legally protected vacation, people’s life will be much more comfortable and safe. However, this does not provide any good to other nations except people living in the country themselves. Therefore, it might be erroneous to say that the general welfare of its people can indicate that the country is great.
In contrast, the achievements of rulers, artists, or scientist have specific outcomes which flourish the human lives. The invention of a light bulb by Edison in the U.K improved human culture into another realm. Thanks to the invention, we can read books even when it is dark outside. We could be released from the constraints about the time use. Additionally, the invention of iPhone, enabled our life to be more closely connected with internet. This opened a new way of communication, commerce, and resulted in development of a new industry using a mobile application. For instance, people does not need to visit banks to transfer money. The only thing needed is just one click on the phone and it will say you had succeeded in that transfer, without any commission fee. For this reason, the achievement of scientists is the surest indicator of the great nation as this brings huge impact on the human society.
Even if some say, the excellent welfare system can be a good model for other countries, so it gives benefits too, but it is not necessarily right. Not only is it not sure whether other countries can adapt the same welfare system nor even if it is plausible, it is not proven whether the change will bring positive results to other countries. For instance, the high welfare requires more tax income from its citizen. If the United States start to gather tax from its people as much as the Norway government does, there will be huge concerns about reduced consumer spending and following economic recession. Likewise, the welfare system has differences between countries depending on its social, economic structure. Therefore, the welfare country cannot meet the standard of great nation in this sense.
In sum, rather than the general welfare of a country, the achievements of leaders are the surest indicator that the country is a great country as this can improve the human civilization and benefit many people around the world.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
This essay topic gives two indicators about a great nation:
A: the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists,
B: the general welfare of its people.
while we can't make a new indicator: the country where can bring positive benefits to other countries
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If we used Edison as the example, then in Edison time, maybe U.K has both A and B, we will need to argue why A is the surest indicator, not B
If we use Norway as an example, suppose Norway has only B, no A, then we will need to argue why Norway is not a great country
or another country has only A, not good at B, we need to argue why still we think it is a great nation
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2360 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.394 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: K
...tion of a light bulb by Edison in the U.K improved human culture into another rea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, likewise, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2440.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96945010183 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72828664534 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494908350305 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2953158552 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4583333333 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.20833333333 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286046526508 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847975525623 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841202808016 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171569969151 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509006556837 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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