Creating an appealing image is important for some people in order to get accepted and recognized in the society. In spite of this, the appealing image is not the most important part for all societies. I believe that the reality and truth are absolutely the most essential things in contemporary society and all the other societies for many reasons.
Not only in the contemporary society but also in all kinds of society from the past to the present, people always keep their images good in the public. Most people try to create and show their own impressive images. We can see many friends’ fantastic activities on the Facebook. They may post their pictures in an exciting vacation in Japan. Some of them may have nice dinners in luxurious restaurants. However, we have rarely seen our friends doing their hard jobs at workplaces and having argument with their families. People would like to show the good parts of their lives to the public and hide their lives’ toughness because they believe that the appealing images are important and can make societies accept them.
Although, the appealing image is important because people can feel impressive when they see someone in a good look, when the reality or truth behind that image is revealed, people certainly pay more attention on this reality than on the decorated image. The politicians who use to be praised by a lot of people in their devotion to country development can lost all of their fame after their corruption evidences are revealed. Therefore, an appealing image can be important only when people do not know the truth behind it. If the reality or truth, which may not conform to that appealing image, is widely spread, the public will ignore that created image and choose to believe in the truth.
In conclusion, the appealing image is only the small part to make the other people praise us. To have a sustainable fame in societies, we need to have good characteristics both in the front and behind the scenes because, finally, the reality and the truth will be the only things that the public can accept.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need three arguments and five paragraphs.
suggested:
Introduction: I agree that image has become a more central concern, at least where short-term business or political success is at stake. Nevertheless, the longer term image ultimately yields to substance and fact.
argument 1: The important role of image is particularly evident in the business world.
argument 2:The growing significance of image is also evident in the political realm, particularly when it comes to presidential politics.
argument 3: In the long terms, however, the significance of image wanes considerably.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1680 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.719 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.447 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.003 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the other societies for many reasons. Not only in the contemporary society but...
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Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ant and can make societies accept them. Although, the appealing image is importa...
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Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...he decorated image. The politicians who use to be praised by a lot of people in the...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'in conclusion', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224489795918 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.160714285714 0.157235817809 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0765306122449 0.0880659088768 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0484693877551 0.0497285424764 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0561224489796 0.0444667217837 126% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114795918367 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0459183673469 0.0406280797675 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57829671249 2.79330140395 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030612244898 0.030933414821 99% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119897959184 0.0997080785238 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.030612244898 0.0249443105267 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127551020408 0.0148568991511 86% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2092.0 2732.02544248 77% => OK
No of words: 356.0 452.878318584 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87640449438 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.58838876751 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331460674157 0.366273622748 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23595505618 0.280924506359 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168539325843 0.200843997647 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13202247191 0.132149295362 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57829671249 2.79330140395 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 219.290929204 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477528089888 0.48968727796 98% => OK
Word variations: 49.575853779 55.4138127331 89% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 22.25 23.380412469 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0709426047 59.4972553346 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.75 141.124799967 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 23.380412469 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.674092028746 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 45.845505618 51.4728631049 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.45192307692 1.64882698954 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.461712693202 0.391690518653 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.159764268961 0.123202303941 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103821769598 0.077325440228 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.563233538204 0.547984918172 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189614357426 0.149214159877 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198832488456 0.161403998019 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112130133709 0.0892212321368 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.457896630217 0.385218514788 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0535942400241 0.0692045440612 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.345485576832 0.275328986314 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495506621816 0.0653680567796 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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