Choosing courses is an essential task for college students, since the courses they take will decide what kind of knowledge they can learn from universities, and very likely to become their career focus. The policy requires every student to take various courses outside the student’s field of study. In my opinion, I strongly agree that students should take courses from diverse domains aside from their own major for three reasons.
To begin with, taking courses from different fields can equip students with professional knowledge in various domains, making students more likely to standout from the competitive career market, which strongly prefers T-shaped person than one who is only skillful in one specific field. For instance, in the era of technology, almost every company from every industry is leveraging technology to make innovation so as to be irreplaceable and make more revenues. However, in order to reach that target, companies would need people who can not only understand technology but also their domain knowledge to carry out the transformation. Take financial industry as an example. If a bank wants to hire a person to develop their digital banking and launch a new mobile banking application with the most innovative functions so as to attract young-aged customers, the bank will definitely require this person with a technological background. However, it is not enough for the ideal candidate to understand and be skillful only in the technology field. Without knowledge in financial industry, he would not be able to judge if his plan is doable according to local financial regulation or if it is beneficial from a revenue management side. Whereas, if this person has taken some financial courses in universities, he would be prepared with knowledge of financial management and financial laws. In this way, he would be more competent for the role. Consequently, the example well demonstrates the importance of taking course outside students’ field of study.
Further, sometimes students are forced to choose their major at the moment when they are actually not so sure about what they really want to go for in the future. In this case, taking courses from not only their major field can give students more opportunities to keep searching for where their passion is. For instance, if a student had no idea what she wanted to do in her junior year and chose computer science as a major considering the job availability, but because her university required her to take course outside computer science, she then took a literature course, and surprisingly fell in love in the world of literature, and eventually becomes a writer. We can tell from the example that taking courses aside from students’ major fields can grant students precious chances to broaden their horizons and increase the possibilities to find what they truly love.
Some may argue that students should be as much proficient in their major as they can be so that they can top their field of study in universities or after graduation. However, as mentioned above, in this fast changing world, it will be far than enough for students to be proficient in only a specific field. If the field of students’ major study unexpectedly becomes outdated some day in the future, students who know only one domain knowledge are doomed to fall together with their major study. However, if students have learned more in universities, they can still survive with their T-shaped skillsets. Therefore, I strongly agree with the policy that students should take a variety of courses outside their own field of study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, therefore, well, whereas, as to, for instance, kind of, of course, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3030.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 588.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15306122449 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83552927945 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457482993197 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 950.4 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2032360672 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.727272727 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86363636364 5.21951772744 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276533768466 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107579762686 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949488529215 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198652037582 0.150359130593 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415580422589 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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