As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and
mysterious
In this statement, it has been indicated that there is an inverse relationship between acquiring more knowledge and becoming things more comprehensible as well as things getting more complex and mysterious as we acquiring more knowledge. It is not unlikely that people become educated, gather more knowledge than they usually have, just for the purpose of getting something like everyone is doing. Education is one of the basic needs of human being and as a part of society, people need to educate themselves. If people didn't come up with the idea of acquiring knowledge, we wouldn't be the people living in modern society.
We know the importance of education and for this, we are building a school, colleges, universities, etc. and sending our offsprings to these institutions. Education is a step by step process which is why we cannot skip primary school to go to secondary school or one cannot go to university without achieving the degree of college. Children achieve knowledge in high school and use this knowledge in college education or universities for further education. Thus, a student gets to learn about simple algebra formula in high school level and by using this formula it becomes easier for her to understand Fourier series, Laplace transforms or some other mathematics of Differential or Integral calculus in further education.
Afterward, when the student after having completed the university education join in a job where he needs to apply that knowledge which is acquired back in university education. However, institutional education isn't alone can suffice the requirement in a job environment. He needs to get further knowledge about his job. Consequently, the company arranges training facilities for the freshers so that they can acquire that knowledge and perform better in the workplace. The more a fresher acquire knowledge about his work, the more he can become expert in his field. Thus he can overcome the enigma of the new work environment and new work.
However, one may claim that the more a student gets knowledge, the more doors of opportunities become open in front of him which make him flummoxed. The more he gets things mysterious. However, opening the door of opportunities should be our prime goal as the more opportunity we have, the more we can succeed. Knowledge, as a whole, is meant to be make something easier to perceive for us.
- People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers 70
- In any profession — business, politics, education, government — those in power should stepdown after five years. 16
- As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex andmysterious 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... need to educate themeselves. If people didnt come up with the idea of acquiring know...
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Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
...chieve knowledge in high school and use these knowledge in college education or universities fo...
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Message: Did you mean 'this formula' or 'these formulae', 'these formulas'?
Suggestion: this formula; these formulae; these formulas
...rmula in high school level and by using these formula it becomes easier for her to understand...
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Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'those knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; those knowledges
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Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'those knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; those knowledges
...r the freshers so that they can acquire those knowledge and perform better in the workplace. Th...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...more he can become expert in his field. Thus he can overcome the enigma of new work ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10025706941 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8853541896 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514138817481 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5998661435 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.421052632 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345122298389 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111505034253 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154118656196 0.0758088955206 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232024220637 0.150359130593 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157181971516 0.0667264976115 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.