Which poses the greater threat to society, individualism or conformity?
Living in a world that is advancing and progressing with every passing second can be both exhausting and exciting. The technology advancements has made everyone more self-reliant and independent. While this is a good thing for every person to be able to perform tasks in a much more convenient and efficient way, it also has plenty of its downsides. For instance, this has created a distance between people, with people not fully being there for each other and completely immersed in their own lives. Hence, considering this aspect of life, individualism poses a greater threat as compared to conformity. There are many arguments to support this statement. People tend to distance themselves from the rest of the world and live in their own space, which can, yes, be beneficial if done mildly, but is quite dangerous and self-destructive if that is a person's lifestyle. Furthermore, a team leader who is purely an individualist can never be a true leader because of their inability of knowing how to work as a group collectively and listen to others and make decisions together. Lastly, individualists can be extremely stubborn and self-centered, thereby decreasing their chances of survival in an environment that necessitates cooperation with people.
Individualists tend to distance themselves from the rest of the world and live in their own space. These are the type of people who like to rely only on themselves for everything. Due to that, they might think that they don't need other people in their lives since they can supposedly handle everything on their own. As good it can be for a person to depend on their own selves for all they need, it is certainly not healthy if practiced too frequently. Humans need to be connected to each other for their own wellness. To have people in one's life on which a person can rely in good or bad times is a very comforting feeling that no one should be deprived of. Being detached from the world can be very harmful and self-destructive because it can cause loneliness, which further probably leads to depression and anxiety. Whereas conformity allows people to be there for each other and rely on each other, resulting in a much more healthier environment that can boosts a person's confidence, self-worth, and morale.
Next, a leader who is an individualist can never fully be a true leader because they don't know how to fully connect and communicate with their team. Leaders unequivocally must possess qualities such as ability to relay and discuss information with their team, be able to attentively listen to their ideas and concerns, and be their mentor. Unfortunately, a true individualist does not have such caliber. In contrast, a conformist leader would be more involved with his/her team and be much more communicative and therefore, would be a good mentor.
Lastly, due to individualists being highly self-reliant, this can turn them into exceedingly stubborn people. Because they presume that they don't really need people in their lives, it can make them very self-centered and selfish. They might think that they are above others since they don't need anyone and therefore can make themselves even more distant and rude. To think that you don't need anyone is highly delusional as we are human beings who need human connection in their lives, hence making individualists delusional. Additionally, this also acts as a repulsive force, driving people away, and hence leading to even more loneliness. But in comparison, conformists are down to earth people who make sure that there behavior is good with others. They make sure to have good relationships and put a lot of effort and work in them to make them even stronger and better.
Hence, by considering everything discussed, it can be concluded that individualism is more threatening than conformity. Human connection is very important. It is absolutely crucial for a person to be able to have people in his/her life on which he can rely on and communicate with them through good and bad times. Furthermore, distancing oneself from the world can be very harmful as it can cause loneliness and depression. Lastly, in terms of leadership, a leader need to be more open and accessible, both of those qualities not possessed by an individualist. Hence, it can again be said that pure individualism is more dangerous than conformity, and therefore people should practice a mix of both conformity and individualism to have the best personality.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... can, yes, be beneficial if done mildly, but is quite dangerous and self-destruct...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...erous and self-destructive if that is a persons lifestyle. Furthermore, a team leader w...
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...Due to that, they might think that they dont need other people in their lives since ...
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Suggestion: one's
...r their own wellness. To have people in ones life on which a person can rely in good...
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Line 2, column 924, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
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Suggestion: healthier
...rely on each other, resulting in a much more healthier environment that can boosts a persons c...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...healthier environment that can boosts a persons confidence, self-worth, and morale. N...
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Suggestion: don't
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...rtunately, a true individualist does not have such caliber. In contrast, a confor...
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...ore distant and rude. To think that you dont need anyone is highly delusional as we ...
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Suggestion:
...herefore people should practice a mix of both conformity and individualism to hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, really, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.5258426966 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 34.0 12.4196629213 274% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 37.0 14.8657303371 249% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 33.0505617978 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3713.0 2235.4752809 166% => OK
No of words: 739.0 442.535393258 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02435723951 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.21388093824 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01863062135 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414073071719 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1172.7 704.065955056 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2331432038 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.205882353 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7352941176 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0599609009486 0.243740707755 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0205500981056 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557836839855 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0395457528195 0.150359130593 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368042749736 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 794, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can, yes, be beneficial if done mildly, but is quite dangerous and self-destruct...
^^
Line 1, column 853, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...erous and self-destructive if that is a persons lifestyle. Furthermore, a team leader w...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 221, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...Due to that, they might think that they dont need other people in their lives since ...
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Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...r their own wellness. To have people in ones life on which a person can rely in good...
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Line 2, column 924, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...rely on each other, resulting in a much more healthier environment that can boosts a persons c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 969, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...healthier environment that can boosts a persons confidence, self-worth, and morale. N...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ver fully be a true leader because they dont know how to fully connect and communica...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rtunately, a true individualist does not have such caliber. In contrast, a confor...
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Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... people. Because they presume that they dont really need people in their lives, it c...
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Line 4, column 286, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...k that they are above others since they dont need anyone and therefore can make them...
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Line 4, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ore distant and rude. To think that you dont need anyone is highly delusional as we ...
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Line 5, column 693, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...herefore people should practice a mix of both conformity and individualism to hav...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, really, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.5258426966 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 34.0 12.4196629213 274% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 37.0 14.8657303371 249% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 33.0505617978 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3713.0 2235.4752809 166% => OK
No of words: 739.0 442.535393258 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02435723951 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.21388093824 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01863062135 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414073071719 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1172.7 704.065955056 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2331432038 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.205882353 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7352941176 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0599609009486 0.243740707755 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0205500981056 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557836839855 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0395457528195 0.150359130593 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368042749736 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.