You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say – What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to do about it?

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You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say – What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to do about it?

Dear Jack,

I hope this letter finds you well. Thanks so much for lending some CDs and a video camera for Jonathan’s birthday party. I appreciate your altruistic behavior for giving me your expensive gadget.

I wish you were here. It was a blast. I ‘m sorry to say that one of the CDs that you had borrowed lent me was completely damaged by my relatives’ children that are too much hyperactive. Unfortunately, they had damaged not only my personal belongings such as classic cassettes, but also your “happy birthday songs” album. Its frame was totally broken and the whole of the surface of the CD was badly scratched. Please accept my apologies for what has happened. Please inform me about the way of compensation.

If you like, I‘ll buy a new one or pay the price of the original album. Please do not hesitate to call me about this matter. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,

Carl Whitely s

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Jack, I hope this letter finds you well. Thank...
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Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'belongings'.
Suggestion: belongings
...rtunately, they had damaged not only my personal belongings such as classic cassettes, but also you...
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Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o hearing from you soon. Best wishes, Carl Whitely s
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 58.6224719101 22% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 802.0 2235.4752809 36% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 165.0 442.535393258 37% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86060606061 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 4.55969084622 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86539147754 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 215.323595506 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.69696969697 0.4932671777 141% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 704.065955056 35% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 11.0 23.0359550562 48% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4959685572 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 57.2857142857 118.986275619 48% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.7857142857 23.4991977007 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24226210958 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755108564419 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407274167108 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158771823283 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00778129095169 0.0667264976115 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 14.1392134831 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 12.1743820225 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.02 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 100.480337079 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 11.2143820225 57% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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