creative artist should always be given freedom to express their own ideas (in words music or film ) in whichever way they wish . there should be no government restriction on what they do
Art is one of the most important part of every culture and artist is the one who create it. In every nation you can easily find out about their history and culture by looking through their artists ‘s works. Every artists have their own way of thought and behavior which separate them from each other. They use diverse methods to describe their opinion however, their thought is against government or it conforms them. They use imagination and creativity to describe situation through out music films or books. Some times the described situation is a means of persisting against government and its decisions. Although government does not prefer that opposite opinion spreads between people , should creative artists be free to make what they want ?
In these days you can see some disagreement against government policy. Artist are the one who reflect people ‘s behavior in country. First of all artist should be allowed to creative what they see and use true facts in their creation of situation. For example when the price goes up they can produce a comedy movie to explain their disagreement and show government the consequence of it. Second of all giving freedom to the artists tells people they can talk about their situation and problems and no one pushes them to be quite. For instance when the amount of criminal increases over the country, artists should write a creative article to describe true situation in the best way. If the government dose not allow them and pushes them to write opposite of it people think they do not have right to talk and may feel pressure in the society.
In other hand every freedom without limitation has its own consequence. It means that giving freedom without limiting it may cause problem in society. For example artists think that for every decisions are mad they can comment on them however they do not have knowlage. In this situation government encounters some disagreement which may destroy the principle of society.
Eventually I think freedom should be given to artists but it should be controlled and limited to show how much they can comment.
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Sentence: Art is one of the most important part of every culture and artist is the one who create it.
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Sentence: Every artists have their own way of thought and behavior which separate them from each other.
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Sentence: For example artists think that for every decisions are mad they can comment on them however they do not have knowlage.
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