the map below is of the town of Garlsdon . A new supermarket(s) is planned for the town . The map shows tow passible sites for the supermarket.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant .
The map shows 2 possible places for building the supermarket in the town of Garlsdon .
As you can see in the map the first place for supermarket S1 is in the countryside . It locates between two main transportation system respectively main roads and railway . Although it is far from the center of the city it is easy to reach it. There are 12 km from Bransdon to supermarket .
you can see that the second place S2 is in the town center You can go there by railway which is near it . However you can not go there by your own car it locates near the housing part of the city . There is 25 from right side to Crosdon and 16 km from left to Brandsdon to supermarket .
The second place is almost near the most popular part of the city thus a lot of people can go there . However the first place is a bit far away from town center it is near to the all of the transportation systems and it is far from industry part of the city .
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- the map below is of the town of Garlsdon . A new supermarket(s) is planned for the town . The map shows tow passible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant . 65
Sentence: However the first place is a bit far away from town center it is near to the all of the transportation systems and it is far from industry part of the city .
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Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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No. of Words: 180 200
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No. of Different Words: 83 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.663 4.0
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 26 50
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No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
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Sentence Length SD: 6.181 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
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