The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during the typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
The graph shows the number of electricities that English people used in a day during winter and summer. The pie chart gives information about what types of electricity that they used for.
According to the graph, the demand for electricities in winter are higher 17.000 units on average than the demand in summer. Both in summer and winter, the fewest used for electricity is at 08.00-09.00. While there are just about 12.000 electrical tools that people used in summer at that spesific time, in winter the numbers are about 30.000 units. On the other hand, the highest demand for electronic items is at 14.00 while in winter the highest is at 22.00.
According to the pie chart, most people used electricity for heating rooms and heating water (52,5%). 17,5 percent electricity is used for kitchen and laundry needs. Intersetingly, both electronic equipment that usually is used in living room (TV, radio, and lamps) and electrical tools such as vacuum cleaners and food mixers have the same percentage, 15%.
Overall, the need of heating room and heating water result in dramatic increase of total of electricities that people used in winter.
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According to the graph, the demand for electricities in winter are higher 17.000 units on average than the demand in summer.
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