Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Modern era provides many modern tools, that help people to do their daily activities, but they should work hard to get invention or achieve of standard quality today. On the other hand, several people think that a lot of children suffer because of that case. Different with juveniles in the past, who receive more attention from their parents. Both of opinion have different side to see the positive and the negative effect.
A large number of young people trap in dark environment because they get less attention from their parents, that always busy to work. as a kid, every person need to feel comfort while they close with their parents, and they could share and play together with their guardian. Moreover, most of old people over focus with their business, and they too tired to ask their son or daughter’s activities. As a result, between parents and children appear a distance, so they feel weird to talk each other. Therefore, it could make children to be independent individual because they usual to do anything by themselves without helped by their parents.
A few people believe that children in the past happier than children in the modern age because they get more attention from their parents. Parents, who always ready to help their youngster, have much time to do some activities together with their family such as playing, sharing, and studying, and it give many benefit for built familiarity for all familiy’s members. For example, a daughter confuse to finish her homework, and in that time she could ask directly her mother to help her. Besides they could crack jokes and built feel rely on each other. However, it make toddlers become spoiled person because they always get help easily while they face a problem, and they would shock and easy to give up while they show the real problem in their life. This would be the real suffer in their life if they have not helping from people in around them.
To sum up, children in the past and the present have suffer in their life in different ways, and they would feel happy if they obtain to put the good position in their life.
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Sentence: Different with juveniles in the past, who receive more attention from their parents.
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Sentence: Therefore, it could make children to be independent individual because they usual to do anything by themselves without helped by their parents.
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Sentence: Parents, who always ready to help their youngster, have much time to do some activities together with their family such as playing, sharing, and studying, and it give many benefit for built familiarity for all familiy's members.
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Sentence: For example, a daughter confuse to finish her homework, and in that time she could ask directly her mother to help her.
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Sentence: Besides they could crack jokes and built feel rely on each other.
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Sentence: However, it make toddlers become spoiled person because they always get help easily while they face a problem, and they would shock and easy to give up while they show the real problem in their life.
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Sentence: To sum up, children in the past and the present have suffer in their life in different ways, and they would feel happy if they obtain to put the good position in their life.
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