Some people say that individuals are depending a lot on each other and some say individuals are getting more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Life has undergone changes with the developments in technology and trends in society. Some people are of the view that individuals are of increasingly dependent on one another, where as others opine that people are becoming more individualistic. This essay examines both views and arrives at a conclusion that people are become more independent.
On the one hand, individuals are becoming closer to one other, thanks to globalization and internet. People from different parts of the world can exchange anything round the clock. As cheap communication become reality through internet, people intere...
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Sir... Opine I used instead
Sir...
Opine I used instead of opinion...!
Thanks for your encouragments..
Hi Tessy, Here is my
Hi Tessy,
Here is my opinions:
Some people are of the view that individuals are of increasingly dependent ...
->...individuals are of increasing dependence ... or...individuals are increasingly dependent ...
...individuals are becoming closer to one other,...
->...closer to one another...
As cheap communication become reality ...
->...becomes reality ...
Younger generation also more independent...
-> Younger generation is also...
Anyway, GJ!
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