Succeccful sports professionals can earn a great deal money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
In the swift development of the modern world today, there has been a growing concern about the justify of income for sport professional. Some people says that a sport professionals, for instance, an athletes can obtain high salary, while the other argue that they are not qualified for a great income.
An athlete deserves high salary due to the fact that they have a great skill and talent. It can be realized that with spesific and great ability deserve a highest income. For example, Gareth bale, a football player, has been transfered from totenham hotspur to real madrid with an expensive budget. Real madrid can give high salary to gareth bale because he is a top scorer from totenham. He can make many goals in the previous seasons. The other reason are they had to switch the time of formal study in early age with a practice and focus on their skill. For example, the gold medalist mix double badminton team of indonesia, Liliana natsir, just finished her study until elementary school, after that she just focus & practice to become the great badminton player.
However, several people agree that an athlete does not earn a significant salary. They think an athlete does not have a contribution to society, while teacher does. Teacher always give their knowledge to student, while an athlete just obtain the salary for theirself.
All in all, in my opinion, an athlete are deserve obtain a great income, because that is the appretiation for their effort. They had been practice all the time in their early age. They spent much time to become a great athlete
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Sentence: In the swift development of the modern world today, there has been a growing concern about the justify of income for sport professional.
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Suggestion: Refer to the and justify
Sentence: Some people says that a sport professionals, for instance, an athletes can obtain high salary, while the other argue that they are not qualified for a great income.
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Sentence: All in all, in my opinion, an athlete are deserve obtain a great income, because that is the appretiation for their effort.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
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Teacher always give their knowledge to student, while an athlete just obtain the salary for theirself.
Teacher always gives their knowledge to student, while an athlete just obtains the salary for theirself.
Sentence: It can be realized that with spesific and great ability deserve a highest income.
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Sentence: For example, Gareth bale, a football player, has been transfered from totenham hotspur to real madrid with an expensive budget.
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Sentence: Real madrid can give high salary to gareth bale because he is a top scorer from totenham.
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Sentence: Teacher always give their knowledge to student, while an athlete just obtain the salary for theirself.
Error: theirself Suggestion: ?
Sentence: All in all, in my opinion, an athlete are deserve obtain a great income, because that is the appretiation for their effort.
Error: appretiation Suggestion: appreciation
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