the two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
The two maps below show some developments of an island, before and after the constraction which conducted to improve some tourist fasilities.
The first picture shows a map of the island before the construction. We can see a huge island surrounded by sea. The island was still virgin with no building but there is a beach in the west side of the island.
At the second map, we can see a lots of buildings constructed on the island. There are two areas for accomodation. The first is in the west which near the beach and the latter is in the center of the island. In the middle of the two accomodation areas there is a reception building and a restaurant in the north. The restaurant and the reception building is connected by vehicle track which also goes direct to the pier. There is also a footpath which connected every building in the island and make tourists easier to reach the beach where they are able to swim.
In conclussion, there are some significant developments which created to attract tourists. The island has become a good place which provide many facilities for tourism.
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Sentence: The island has become a good place which provide many facilities for tourism.
Description: The fragment which provide many is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense
Sentence: The two maps below show some developments of an island, before and after the constraction which conducted to improve some tourist fasilities.
Error: constraction Suggestion: construction
Error: fasilities Suggestion: facilities
Sentence: There are two areas for accomodation.
Error: accomodation Suggestion: accommodation
Sentence: In the middle of the two accomodation areas there is a reception building and a restaurant in the north.
Error: accomodation Suggestion: accommodation
Sentence: In conclussion, there are some significant developments which created to attract tourists.
Error: conclussion Suggestion: conclusion
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
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No. of Words: 192 200
No. of Characters: 879 1000
No. of Different Words: 96 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.722 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.578 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.635 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 54 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 35 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.568 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4