the two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

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the two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps below show some developments of an island, before and after the constraction which conducted to improve some tourist fasilities.

The first picture shows a map of the island before the construction. We can see a huge island surrounded by sea. The island was still virgin with no building but there is a beach in the west side of the island.

At the second map, we can see a lots of buildings constructed on the island. There are two areas for accomodation. The first is in the west which near the beach and the latter is in the center of the island. In the middle of the two accomodation areas there is a reception building and a restaurant in the north. The restaurant and the reception building is connected by vehicle track which also goes direct to the pier. There is also a footpath which connected every building in the island and make tourists easier to reach the beach where they are able to swim.

In conclussion, there are some significant developments which created to attract tourists. The island has become a good place which provide many facilities for tourism.

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Sentence: The island has become a good place which provide many facilities for tourism.
Description: The fragment which provide many is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense

Sentence: The two maps below show some developments of an island, before and after the constraction which conducted to improve some tourist fasilities.
Error: constraction Suggestion: construction
Error: fasilities Suggestion: facilities

Sentence: There are two areas for accomodation.
Error: accomodation Suggestion: accommodation

Sentence: In the middle of the two accomodation areas there is a reception building and a restaurant in the north.
Error: accomodation Suggestion: accommodation

Sentence: In conclussion, there are some significant developments which created to attract tourists.
Error: conclussion Suggestion: conclusion

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