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GDP Number -Syerapke- (overwrite)

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The chart below compared the percentage in the number average annual Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in a-four decades, started from 1960s to 1990s, in a field of wealthy countries, globalisers, and non-globalisers.

In general, the two high GDP percentages came from wealthy country and globalizers in the different decades while the troughs, in the entire decades, gained by non-globaliser country.

Turning to the details, the data revealed that the GDP of non-globalisers country fluctuated in a first third decades but recovered slightly by 13 per cent in 1990s. However, after a short peak period with 4,7 per cent in 1960, wealthy country’s GDP felt gradually onto 2 per cent in 1990s. Standing in contrast with the former, the globaliser’s GDP dramatically increased from 2,2 per cent the and reached the top notch GDP ever by 5,9 per cent in the end period of question.

A more detailed look at the chart compares that the overall years GDP in numbers is not always steady. in a period of sixty decades, wealthy country’s GDP become the highest by 5,7 per cent while in the next decades non-globaliser’s GDP is noted as the best percentage GDP by 3,2. Therefore, the globalisers experienced the highest GDP from 1980s to 1990s.

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Sentence: The chart below compared the percentage in the number average annual Gross Domestic Product GDP in a-four decades, started from 1960s to 1990s, in a field of wealthy countries, globalisers, and non-globalisers.
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while the troughs, in the entire decades, gained by non-globaliser country.
while the troughs, in the entire decades, are gained by non-globaliser countries.

fluctuated in a first third decades
fluctuated in the first third decades

Sentence: Standing in contrast with the former, the globaliser's GDP dramatically increased from 2,2 per cent the and reached the top notch GDP ever by 5,9 per cent in the end period of question.
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The chart below compares the percentage in the number of annual Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in a-four decades from 1960s to 1990s in a field of wealthy countries, globalisers, and non-globalisers.

In general, the chart showed that the wealthy countries and the globalisers in the different decades reached two high GDP percentages while a trough percentage was gained by non-globaliser countries.

Turning to the details, the chart revealed that the GDP of non-globalisers countries fluctuated in a first third decades then recovered slightly to 13 per cent in 1990s. However, after a short peak period with 4,7 per cent in 1960, wealthy country’s GDP felt gradually onto 2 per cent in 1990s. Standing in contrast with the former, the globaliser’s GDP was increased dramatically. Appearing from 2,2 per cent, this figure reached the top notch GDP ever to more than 5,9 per cent .

A more detailed look at the chart compares that the highest GDP in numbers was not always steady. In the period of sixty decades, wealthy country’s GDP become the highest by 5,7 per cent and therefore in the next decades non-globaliser’s GDP was noted as the best GDP to more than 3 percent . However, the globalisers reached the highest GDP in 1980s decades and 1990s decades.