The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make com

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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first bar graph illustrates the total number of people who possessed a computer for the period of 8 years, while the other graph represents a trend of owning a computer according to their educational attainment for a 2 year period. It can be clearly seen that the computer ownership in an 8 year period was constantly increasing, while owning a computer through an educational attainment category was progressively inclining for the year 2002 and 2010.

Let us take a look at the computer ownership. In the year 2002 to 2004, there was a gradual rise of 5%, from 55 to 60% respectively. Followed by a slight step up of 3%, in 2004 and 2006. However, in between year 2006 to 2010, it rapidly shot up to approximately 12%, and finally reaching its highest peak of 75% in the year 2010.

In contrary to computer ownership by educational level. It started from 15% in year 2002, while in the year 2010 it indicates an estimate of more than a two-fold increase of 42%, which was referred to an individuals with no high school diploma. Meanwhile, in high school graduates, it shows a nearly half of increase on the same given period.

Lastly, in college undergraduate the trend has dramatically shoot up to more than a quarter, while in the population of bachelor's degree and postgraduate qualification, it created a difference of 25% for the first and 20% for the latter in between year 2002 and 2010 respectively.

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while the other graph represents
while the another graph represents

Sentence: It started from 15 in year 2002, while in the year 2010 it indicates an estimate of more than a two-fold increase of 42, which was referred to an individuals with no high school diploma.
Error: two-fold Suggestion: twofold

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The second graph is not depicted well. Read the topic again: '..by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.'

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Sir,

I was thinking this is the best way to write it. Do you mean I need to rewrite my second pharagraph and try to compare both trends? Please advise me on what to do with this I'm a bit confused with the data because of a lot of trends to mention with. I even try to re write it in paper twice and find that 20 minutes cannot cover all the details in this essay.

Please guide me on how to handle this kind of question . Thank you.

The rule is: if there is only one graph, you can put a little bit more details, while if there are two graphs, you only need to talk about the trends generally. The reasons behind are that you don't have time to go details.

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