Line graph given in the picture.
The line graph we are given illustrates how many people visit by a London metro station during a day.At first glance we can see some fluctuation in the number of passengers.
To begin with, 8.00am is the busiest time of the underground station, at 400, however, after this time the number decreases considerably and goes under 200 at 10.00am. The same thing happens after 4.00pm. The rate rises significantly and reaches the second highest point at 6.00pm with nearly 370 citizens going there, but after that it declined dramatically and hit the third lowest point at 8.00am, at almost 120.
It would be seem that there is only a small period of stability covering two hours between 12.00am and 2.00pm. The number grows gradually during this period and showed the third most crowded time, with 300 being equal to 9.00am.
Overall, the number seem to reflect the beginning and ending time of work as the most popular compare to the rest of the day.
how many people visit by a London metro station
how many people visit a London metro station
It would be seem that
It would seem that
the number seem to reflect the beginning
the number seems to reflect the beginning
as the most popular compare to the rest of the day.
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Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 173 200
No. of Characters: 765 1000
No. of Different Words: 112 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.627 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.422 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.301 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 44 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 27 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 14 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.003 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.734 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4