Given is the two pie charts that illustrate the online shopping which tralev, film/music, books and clothes were sold in New Zealand between two years 2003 and 2013. The general view is that books sector had slightly change that other sectors both of period.
To specify, What stands out from the pie charts, in 2003, the biggest amount sales was occupied travel with 36%, followed by clothes and film/music 24% and 21% respectively. The opposite was revealed in books sector, with the lowest percentage was only 19%.
When it comes to make a comparison, in 2013, film/music rose slightly to one quater, this meant it had the highest sales of four sectors in that year, while travel was a gradual drop to 6%. To be more precise, clothes went down approximately to one tenth.
To sum up, online shopping sales in New Zealand was more popular than a decade ago, but only clothes sector had become less account.
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books sector had slightly change that other sectors both of period.
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the biggest amount sales was occupied travel with 36%
the biggest amount of sales was occupied by travel sector with 36%
The opposite was revealed in books sector, with the lowest percentage was only 19%.
The opposite was revealed in books sector, with the lowest percentage which was only 19%.
online shopping sales in New Zealand was more popular than a decade ago
online shopping sales in New Zealand was more popular than that in a decade ago
Sentence: Given is the two pie charts that illustrate the online shopping which tralev, film/music, books and clothes were sold in New Zealand between two years 2003 and 2013.
Error: tralev Suggestion: trade
Sentence: When it comes to make a comparison, in 2013, film/music rose slightly to one quater, this meant it had the highest sales of four sectors in that year, while travel was a gradual drop to 6.
Error: quater Suggestion: No alternate word
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