Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 103 - Quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002

The given graph showcases, the amount of cargo transfered by Road,Water,Rail,and pipeline in British during the year of 1974 to 2002.

A deep dive into the analysis of graph,make us understand that, in 1974, the most of goods moved from road, nearly 70 million tonnes.There after,it rose year after year and ultimately,it reached the peak approximately 100 million tonnes in 2002.In 1974, Rail which was second prefer mode of transport 40 million tonnes.Thereafter, it was only mode of transport which had downward treat ,year after year it came downward .And at the end,in2002 it reached at their starting point 40 million tonnes.On the other hand,water was 40million tonnes in 1974. After passing 10 years,it rose rapidly by 20 million tonnes.And it ended with upward of approximately 65 million tonnes. In constant, pipeline was least used as mode of transport throughout the period with 5million tonnes in 1974 .And it rose by 25 million tonnes respectfully during the end of 38 years.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Water
..., the amount of cargo transfered by Road,Water,Rail,and pipeline in British during the...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...t of cargo transfered by Road,Water,Rail,and pipeline in British during the year of ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , make
... A deep dive into the analysis of graph,make us understand that, in 1974, the most o...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the goods') or simply say ''most goods''.
Suggestion: most of the goods; most goods
...h,make us understand that, in 1974, the most of goods moved from road, nearly 70 million tonn...
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Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...ved from road, nearly 70 million tonnes.There after,it rose year after year and ultim...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: Thereafter
...ved from road, nearly 70 million tonnes.There after,it rose year after year and ultimately,...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...ad, nearly 70 million tonnes.There after,it rose year after year and ultimately,it ...
^^^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...r,it rose year after year and ultimately,it reached the peak approximately 100 mil...
^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly,it reached the peak approximately 100 million tonnes in 2002.In 1974, Rail whi...
^^
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...proximately 100 million tonnes in 2002.In 1974, Rail which was second prefer mode...
^^
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thereafter
...fer mode of transport 40 million tonnes.Thereafter, it was only mode of transport which ha...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'treated'.
Suggestion: treated
...ly mode of transport which had downward treat ,year after year it came downward .And ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...de of transport which had downward treat ,year after year it came downward .And at...
^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... treat ,year after year it came downward .And at the end,in2002 it reached at thei...
^^
Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...reat ,year after year it came downward .And at the end,in2002 it reached at their s...
^^^
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
... their starting point 40 million tonnes.On the other hand,water was 40million tonn...
^^
Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , water
...oint 40 million tonnes.On the other hand,water was 40million tonnes in 1974. After pas...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...n tonnes in 1974. After passing 10 years,it rose rapidly by 20 million tonnes.And i...
^^^
Line 3, column 612, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...rs,it rose rapidly by 20 million tonnes.And it ended with upward of approximately 6...
^^^
Line 3, column 781, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... the period with 5million tonnes in 1974 .And it rose by 25 million tonnes respect...
^^
Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...he period with 5million tonnes in 1974 .And it rose by 25 million tonnes respectful...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16770186335 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08846208458 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.797200204 43.030603864 411% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 208.0 112.824112599 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.25 22.9334400587 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 1.69756097561 1237% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0927812536184 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056335388887 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034290753268 0.0843802449381 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078505840257 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00311005984703 0.0819641961636 4% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.2329268293 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 61.2550243902 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.3012195122 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 11.4329268293 245% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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