All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?
These days, being overweight has been an emerging problem in societies all around the world resulting in detrimental effects on both children and adults.This issue has several causes and we need to do something to provide at least some partial solutions.
First and foremost, there is no doubt that obesity is the consequence of the overconsumption of unhealthy food among most of people in all ages due to the prevalence of “take-away” food. This is most probably because they are preoccupied with a mountain of heavy workloads to cope with. This has led them to spend less time preparing meals and tending to choose fast food for their meals. A particular example for this situation is officers. In fact, their job is a high demanding job that make them have to slave away at their desks around the clock. Therefore, a portion of processed food can be regarded as a perfect option to help stay energetic. However, because of the convenience of fatty food, this begets the consumption of a great deal of the fatty food in almost people from different ages In the aftermath, that has been the potent factor in creating a large number of people being obese recently.
Additionally, the marketing strategies of fast food chains have fruitfully attracted millions of customers. They develop business plans to whet their potential customers’ appetite by integrating online and offline activities. Thanks to eye-catching advertisements in lots of social media and street advertising banners, they hold appeal for an abundance of clients. Not only do they succeed in capturing consumers’ attention but they also know how to give them plentiful choices ofl portions. As far as I concern, in recent years, junk food always allow purchasers to choose the size of meals they want with a reasonable price. Accidentally, this has caused a phenomenon of the use of too much sugary food in people around the world. Consequently, the rate of obesity is becoming increasingly
We need to address this issue before it becomes a serious social problem. Governments should take responsibility for alleviating this problem by introducing several law. The authorities need to ban processed food companies from advertising too much on social platforms and even streets . It can be seen as a way to stop direct exposures of fast food choices to children and adults. Besides, individuals ought to change their eating habits by choosing clean food instead of unhealthy one. Moreover, the officials had better reduce work duties for workers to spend more time caring about their diet.
In conclusion, the problem of obesity is a serious one that needs to be given priority to tackle with the collaboration of government and individuals
- All over the world societies are facing a growing problem with obesity This problem affects both children and adults What are the reasons for this rise in obesity How could it be tackled 84
- All over the world societies are facing a growing problem with obesity This problem affects both children and adults What are the reasons for this rise in obesity How could it be tackled 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, at least, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 5.60731707317 589% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 33.7804878049 219% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2287.0 965.302439024 237% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 446.0 196.424390244 227% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12780269058 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 3.73543355544 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94000759874 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 106.607317073 242% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578475336323 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 283.868780488 244% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 1.53170731707 783% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 8.94146341463 235% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0564485811 43.030603864 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.904761905 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2380952381 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 1.13902439024 966% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240377548199 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672764466799 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614212330093 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143411229058 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039057580619 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 40.7170731707 280% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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