All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?
These days, being overweight has been an emerging problem in societies all around the world resulting in detrimental effects on both children and adults. this issue has several causes and we need to do something to provide at least some partial solutions.
First and foremost, there is no doubt that obesity is the consequence of the overconsumption of unhealthy food among most of the people in all ages due to the prevalence of “take-away” food. this is most probably because they are preoccupied with a mountain of heavy workloads to cope with. this has led them to spend less time preparing meals and tending to choose fast food for their meals. A particular example for this situation is officers. In fact, their job is a high demanding job that make them have to slave away at their desks around the clock. Therefore, a portion of processed food can be regarded as a perfect option to help stay energetic. However, because of the convenience of fatty food, this begets the consumption of a great deal of the fatty food in almost people from different ages In the aftermath, that has been the potent factor in creating a large number of people being obese recently.
Additionally, the marketing strategies of fast food chains have fruitfully attracted millions of customers. they develop business plans to whet their potential customers’ appetite by integrating online and offline activities. Thanks to eye-catching advertisements in lots of social media and street advertising banners, they hold appeal for an abundance of clients. Not only do they succeed in capturing consumers’ attention but they also know how to give them plentiful choices ofl portions. As far as I concern, in recent years, junk food always allow purchasers to choose the size of meals they want with a reasonable price. Accidentally, this has caused a phenomenon of the use of too much sugary food in people around the world. consequently, the rate of obesity is becoming increasingly
we need to address this issue before it becomes a serious social problem. governments should take responsibility for alleviating this problem by introducing several law. The authorities need to ban processed food companies from advertising too much on social platforms and even streets . it can be seen as a way to stop direct exposures of fast food choices to children and adults. Besides, individuals ought to change their eating habits by choosing clean food instead of unhealthy one. Moreover, the officials had better reduce work duties for workers to spend more time caring about their diet.
In conclusion, the problem of obesity is a serious one that needs to be given priority to tackle with the collaboration of government and individuals
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- All over the world societies are facing a growing problem with obesity This problem affects both children and adults What are the reasons for this rise in obesity How could it be tackled 84
- All over the world societies are facing a growing problem with obesity This problem affects both children and adults What are the reasons for this rise in obesity How could it be tackled 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, at least, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1615.20841683 143% => OK
No of words: 448.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16071428571 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92352718057 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 176.041082164 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573660714286 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4974491595 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.090909091 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692489011595 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648818607913 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152665823126 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442947486731 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.