The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart given indicates the proportion of Australian men and women from various age group who regularly took exercises in 2010.

As can be seen from the graph, the only group that had a higher percentage of men engaged in physical activities than women is the people in their 15 to 24, with the proportions being 52.8% and 47.7% respectively. However, we can ascertain a gradual increase in female regular exercisers across age groups which reached at peak of 53.3% in the 45 to 54 year-old women. This figure only fell insignificantly to 53% in the 55 to 64 age group before shrinking to the lowest level off 47.1% in the oldest group.

Conversely, the percentage of 25 to 34 year-old men doing regular physical activities drastically dropped to 42.2% and bottomed out at 39.5% in the 35 to 44 age group. Nevertheless, is showed an upward trend in the older groups and rose to 46.7%, which was virtually equal to the percentage of female counterparts, in the 65 and over.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, however, if, nevertheless

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73837209302 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81958762313 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627906976744 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 26.2488094968 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.833333333 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.23603664747 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282400322604 0.215688989381 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139880877308 0.103423049105 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833737443935 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212999490053 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691936903272 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.2329268293 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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