The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The visuals reveal the information regarding the proportion of Australian by carrying out to sustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical effort according to gender and the various age groups in the year 2010
Overall, the adolescent boys had seen more dynamic and vigorous than girls, whereas the reverse was true for the male from the age group of 25 to over 65.
A deep analysis of the bar chart disclosure, it is unambiguous observed that the figure of man in the 15 to 24 age group who attached to physical activities was 52.8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man had been subordinate physical activites, after decreasing substantially from 52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild drop form 42.2% to 39.5%. Nevertheless, the ratio of woman at the age 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%.
Having a shufty at the graph shown the data that the number of female who performed the excercise, had the downward propensity from the age group 45 to the 65 and over . The 45 to 54 aged woman working out reached a peak 53.3% then fall form the highest point to 53% at the age group 55 to 65 and 47.1% at the aged 65 and over. On the contrary, the figure of man did the physical excercise had a climb in the inclination, after having a accelebration from 39.5% to 43.5% at the aged 45 to 54 , it jump further more to 45.1% in the age group 55 to 65 and 46.7% at the aged 65 to over

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ustain or improve the health and fitness , did the activity requiring physical eff...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...8% and the woman was dwarfed by the man in a similar fashion, just 47.7%. By growing age, the man ha...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...52.8% to 42.2% at the age group 25 to 34 , the 35 to 44 aged men underwent a mild ...
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Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sawed', 'sawn', 'seen'.
Suggestion: sawed; sawn; seen
...to 44 is nagatively correclated, it was saw a modest growth of 1.2% form 47.7% to 4...
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Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'witnessed'.
Suggestion: witnessed
...% to 48.9% in the 25 to 34 aged and had witness a slight upward trend to 52.5%. Having...
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Line 4, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...from the age group 45 to the 65 and over . The 45 to 54 aged woman working out rea...
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Line 4, column 435, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... climb in the inclination, after having a accelebration from 39.5% to 43.5% at th...
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Line 4, column 491, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...from 39.5% to 43.5% at the aged 45 to 54 , it jump further more to 45.1% in the ag...
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Line 4, column 497, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'jumps'?
Suggestion: jumps
...9.5% to 43.5% at the aged 45 to 54 , it jump further more to 45.1% in the age group ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
nevertheless, regarding, then, whereas, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 33.7804878049 181% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 315.0 196.424390244 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.23174603175 4.92477711251 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5268752278 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 106.607317073 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48253968254 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 386.1 283.868780488 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 22.4926829268 200% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.4383048201 43.030603864 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.428571429 112.824112599 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 45.0 22.9334400587 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.23603664747 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236457453761 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12318239554 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485774996884 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145128975555 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588250400415 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 13.2329268293 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 10.3012195122 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.14 11.4140731707 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.4329268293 249% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.9970731707 182% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.