the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010.

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010.

The bar chart demonstrates the percentage of Australian people in various age groups who worked out physical activity regularly in 2010.
overall men's activity was approximately more than that of women's physical activity in all ages. however, in the lowest age of people, there was a significant increase in male physical activity. in addition, they reached approximately an equal percent in 65 years old people and over.
in the term of physical activity, The highest percentage belonged to those men who were in 45 to 54 age group with just under 54 percent. in contrast, men's activity decreased the lowest level in 65 years old and over with only 47.1 %.
with the regards to men's activity, there was a dramatic rise in 15 to 24 age group, which is the highest percentage with only 52.8%.in comparison, the lowest percentage of total(male and female ) was belonged to female between 35 to 44 years old with slightly under 40 percent. Furthermore, in the last item of age groups(65 and over), Australian people reached approximately the same percentage with about 47%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 890.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80693875116 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539325842697 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5726443287 43.030603864 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.25 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288191817425 0.215688989381 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138025620614 0.103423049105 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131140122369 0.0843802449381 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217580796755 0.15604864568 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140246409195 0.0819641961636 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.2329268293 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 61.2550243902 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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