The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar graph illustrate the average percentage of Australian female and male in various age groups who did basic physical activities in 2010. Overall in spite of 15-24 ages, the women did more physical activities as people grow older. But men's physical activities percentage decreased by as men grow older.

Firstly women did physical activity 47,7% in 15-24. It is less than male about 52,8%. In 25-34 ages women to increased by 1,2% than 15-24 ages. It grown certain percentage to 45-54 ages. But the percentage of women activity is drop by to 64 and over ages. To take it, women did a physical activity very much.

Namely a men the percentage of 15-24 ages is 47,7% . After then it is decreased a many percentage to 35-44. Then it increased to 65 and over ages. Man did a daily physical activities about older ages.

In 65 and over ages women and men do a physical activities equality.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, then, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 741.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71974522293 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53513209289 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 75.0 106.607317073 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477707006369 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 22.4926829268 49% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4024001692 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 52.9285714286 112.824112599 47% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.2142857143 22.9334400587 49% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408334536218 0.215688989381 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156310133898 0.103423049105 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110828314529 0.0843802449381 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281992635828 0.15604864568 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100430558655 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 13.2329268293 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.91 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.39 8.06136585366 79% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 40.7170731707 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.4329268293 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.9970731707 58% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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