The bar chart below shows the percentages of visits to the physician by different age groups of patients in the USA in the USA in the year 1995 and 2005 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature

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The bar chart below shows the percentages of visits to the physician by different age groups of patients in the USA in the USA in the year 1995 and 2005.Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main feature.

The bar chart provides information about the percentage of visitors aged from under 15 to over 75 in the USA in two different years 1995 and 2005.

At the onset, it is clear that the age group between45-64 was the highest proportion of visitors in both the decade, while the lowest rate of visitors were aged between15-24 in the two decade.

Now, turning into the details, the rate of patients aged 45 plus , which accounts for 22.9% in 1995, was considerable lower than the proportion of visitors in the same age group, which makes up 29.4% in 2005.The significant decline in visiting doctor’s chamber was seen in the age group from under 15 to 24 yrs .While in 1995, the percentage of underage was 18.9% , which was slightly dropped by 2.2% in 2005, the difference in percentage of adults’ visiting was 1.5 from 1995 to2005.Although the portion of visitors aged over 65 was 13% in 1995, fell to 12.4% in 2005, the percentage of visitors aged 75 over gradually increased from 11.1% to 13.3% over the given period.

Finally, younger people are less frequent visitors during the period over years. In contrast, the percentage of patients aged 75 and over was increased slightly.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 998.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91625615764 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75071782314 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532019704433 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 226.99074871 43.030603864 528% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.6 112.824112599 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.6 22.9334400587 177% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.23603664747 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236797562184 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135488023184 0.103423049105 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107750822137 0.0843802449381 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158290799928 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101534419833 0.0819641961636 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.0 13.2329268293 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 61.2550243902 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.3012195122 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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