The bar chart illustrates the participation of men and females aged 18 20 in various activities during one month

Essay topics:

The bar chart illustrates the participation of men and females aged 18-20 in various activities during one month.

The given chart gives information about the joining in some different outdoor sports of men and women in the age of 18 to 20 throughout the month.
It is clear that men play an indispensable role in the number of sport players, however, cycling and swimming is exceptional.
To begin with football, more than 50% members are men, only roughly 15% females who have passion for this game. In addition, just 12% of girls spending time playing basketball, about 3 times smaller than this figure for boys. Last but not least, hockey is a sport with the least number of players who are really into, only about 5% in women and 12% in men.
In contrast, girl’s hobbies are cycling and swimming. The percentage of biking participants in women and men is 40% and 36% respectively. Swimming takes a lot of time and has priority over other physical exercises. Nearly 35% of the sisters are crazy about swimming and this number is larger than men 15%.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, in addition, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 780.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69879518072 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52903017242 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632530120482 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5430078958 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6666666667 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.23603664747 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147993775544 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589499504588 0.103423049105 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733235567476 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101024365508 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833355026865 0.0819641961636 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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