The bar chart shows the percentages of UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where releant

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The bar chart shows the percentages of UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releant.

The chart compares the proportion of labors accounted for by five crucial fields of industry in the Great Britain over the course of 70 years starting in 1841.

A first glance at the chart reveals an downward trend in the industries, however a reverse one was seen in constructing buildings and services, which latter took place of mass production to require more workers than the others.

The most striking feature observed in the 70-year period is the 48% increase in workforce distribution of the service sector, whose initial figure was only one third, making it the most labor-required industry in 2011. Meanwhile, an opposite tendency was registered in goods production with its quantity of labors, previously making up just under 40 percent of British force of workers, declined deeply by 4 times. In comparison, it is no where near as much as what statistic of food provision experienced, plummeting from 22% to 1%.

With regard to least worker-demanding areas in 1841, albeit there were different patterns, the alterations were so minor the amount of builders, human resource supplying energy and water remained taking the negligible percentage of labors force.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... A first glance at the chart reveals an downward trend in the industries, howev...
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Line 5, column 437, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...deeply by 4 times. In comparison, it is no where near as much as what statistic of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, third, while, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 999.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90035903441 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 106.607317073 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.719576719577 0.547539520022 131% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3346153657 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.5 112.824112599 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 22.9334400587 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.23603664747 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149083932787 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639271734809 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397199501343 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747955491246 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437665792937 0.0819641961636 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.2329268293 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 61.2550243902 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.44 8.06136585366 130% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 40.7170731707 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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