The bar graph displays the changes in the number of visitors going to 4 different museums in London over 5 months from June to October

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The bar graph displays the changes in the number of visitors going to 4 different museums in London over 5 months from June to October.

The bar graph displays the changes in the number of visitors going to 4 different museums in London over 5 months from June to October.

In general, the vast majority of tourists visit the British Museum in all periods, while the National Museum is the least popular with visitors. In addition, August is the most suitable time for people to visit tourist areas.

The numbers of visitors remain constant at just over 410 and 405 in the British and History Museum in the first two months, before increasing nearly twofold to the highest point of 720 in August . After that, they show a marked drop to 450 and 250 in October.

By contrast, the figure for the Science museum remains a little more than 400 in three first months, and it climbs significantly to a peak of 500 in August and plummets to 300 in October. Besides, the number of visitors is similar, at roughly 200 in all months except August when it reaches a high/peak of about 310.

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...cience museum remains a little more than 400 in three first months, and it climbs...
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... roughly 200 in all months except August when it reaches a high/peak of about 31...
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...st when it reaches a high/peak of about 310.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, while, in addition, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 785.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6449704142 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36942023481 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603550295858 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6428024502 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.142857143 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342748971015 0.215688989381 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171333000195 0.103423049105 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.291240134441 0.0843802449381 345% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27898785366 0.15604864568 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.345455821886 0.0819641961636 421% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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