Causes of mortality in young people

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Causes of mortality in young people

The youngsters' mortality rates in the US are presented in the bar chart in term of four different causes in 2009.

Overall, the percentage of youngsters dying with traffic accidents became more and more than those with violence. Those committed suicide fewer, while the more the young people, the more the mortality rates were caused by others.

The majority of young people dying due to traffic accident in US was higher than the other countries, with nearly a fifth, while Malta and Iceland showed the reverse, with only one-fourth of former ones. Furthermore, those dying by violence were dominated by US, with one in ten, but fewer and fewer people in Slovenia and Austria were involved, and Luxembourg had no violence record.

Japanese and Switzerland youngsters tended to suicide, hovering around 10, while the suicide rate in Cyprus accounted for far less of the former, being followed by Denmark, Italy and Germany, with around 5. Moreover, Britain had more mortality rates with other causes compared to others, but the mortality in Singapore was not as many as in Netherland, hovering just below 20 and 25.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
The youngsters mortality rates in the US are presented...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... others. The majority of young people dying due to traffic accident in US was ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1027027027 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51799078133 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572972972973 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8691738115 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.857142857 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233154892626 0.215688989381 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111687381361 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916158600615 0.0843802449381 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137637181412 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262019805517 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.06136585366 117% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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