Central and local governments make a frantic attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programmes for the poor.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Central and local governments make a frantic

attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of

revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programmes for the poor.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In this era of globalization, investing and volunteering money to different situations are more common rather than past. So, central and local governments make a furious attempt to promote a lot of money, while others believe this revenue should divested in social programmes for the poor. This essay will aim to assess the main drowback and conditions of both this statement.

In the modern age the culture of central and local government or society is open for all to observe and take part in. It is understandable that a frantic attempt to promote festivals are beneficial for a tourism industry, such as earning a lot of revenue. But tourist don't only visit sight see but want to experience the festivals and the several people want to preserve spritual life and fatigue. Still, it has rich rewards and income from promoting festivals.

Also, others believe this money should be invested in social programmes for the poor, especially giving motivation and assistance is a good way of humanity. So, being volunteering and investing money for the poor is that central and local government should emphasize money in social programmes. Because of the most important shortagest thing for central and local government, such as it shows the condition of cultural identity. When in coming tourists get in touch of local culture they do not necessarily observe it, but for a government it's a common issue.

To conclude, a frantic attempt to promote festivals are the best way to create a revenue, but being thoughtful for the poor is a side of humanity.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...common rather than past. So, central and local governments make a furious attempt...
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...s earning a lot of revenue. But tourist dont only visit sight see but want to experi...
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...sarily observe it, but for a government its a common issue. To conclude, a franti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 6.8 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1296.0 965.302439024 134% => OK
No of words: 259.0 196.424390244 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00386100386 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81731607523 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 283.868780488 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8731003339 43.030603864 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.483946483131 0.215688989381 224% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165639110338 0.103423049105 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109760111758 0.0843802449381 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281412044775 0.15604864568 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677717061129 0.0819641961636 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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