the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in home in UK

The line graph demonstrates the percentage of modern technology usage changed between 1996 and 2003 in UK’s family. The technology includes four different items i.e. CD player, mobile phone, home computer, and internet access. Overall, all kinds of those technologies experienced upward trends with different details.
Three kinds of electronic products, CD player, mobile phone, and home computer , were reported to be emerged in 1996 with different portion by 60%, around 30%, and slightly under 20%, respectively. Both CD player and home computer had dramatic inclining progressions within a decade, surveyed by more 80% and less 60%, sequentially. Meanwhile, the pattern of mobile phone fluctuated by around 70% in 2003. In the mid-decade, internet access came up by about 10% and grew steadily at above 40% in 2003.
Finally, CD player became the most popular electronic item used in a decade, followed by mobile phone and home computer, while internet access wa the smallest proportion used in UK’s family. (163 words)

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 877.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44720496894 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79937420882 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639751552795 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4037927124 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.625 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.23603664747 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234514349643 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876061838799 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714111398699 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163372012272 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891629501381 0.0819641961636 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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