The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by umerkhani on Fri, 03/02/2018 - 03:21

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of people who hold a science qualification in Malaysia and Singapore.

At a first glance, it is clear that in both countries the percentage of people who don't hold any qualification in science, is significantly higher than those who hold a Master Degree. According to the graph over 60% of the people living in Singapore and Malaysia don't hold a qualification in science whereas only 3% hold a Master Degree. People with school leaving exams

On the other hand, while the difference between the percentage in both countries are relatively small for the people with school leaving exams in science and people with no qualification, the same cannot be said for the people who hold a Bachelor´s Degree. People who live in Singapore that hold a Bachelor’s degree are twice as higher than those who live in Malaysia.
Finally, in both countries the percentage of people with a Master Degree is exactly the same.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 807.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04375 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01956510735 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 72.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.547539520022 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6310587287 43.030603864 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 22.9334400587 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 5.23603664747 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0934092835888 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599852127711 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282700727592 0.0843802449381 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717559870268 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259459928918 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.2329268293 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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