The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. (pounds sterling)
The chart compares the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras) in the UK and France in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.
Overall, what stands out from the bar chart is that the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the given period. Both the British and the French spent most of their money on cars whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the UK compared to cameras in France.
With regards to cars, people in the UK spent about £450,000 on this as opposed to the French who spent £400,000. Likewis...
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Different Words: 87 100 //Better not repeat words in IELTS essays, like: 'spent' is repeated a lot of time on the essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 196 200
No. of Characters: 898 1000
No. of Different Words: 87 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.742 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.582 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.131 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 16 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.479 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.672 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Dear sir, may I ask, how can
Dear sir, may I ask, how can I improve on number of different words as mentioned in flaws? Thank you sir.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, likewise, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 949.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 196.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84183673469 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37929667893 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484693877551 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.463562273 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.09811892413 0.215688989381 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556618643275 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586407765572 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877491914545 0.15604864568 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716792424882 0.0819641961636 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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