The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The frequency of heart attacks in the US.MenWomenThousands29-4445-6

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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The frequency of heart attacks in the US.
Men
Women
Thousands
29-44
45-64
65+

The chart shows how age and gender influence the frequency of heart attacks in the US.
Less than 6% of all heart attacks occur in the 29-44 age group. The number of women who suffer heart attacks in this group is negligible – only 3000 per year, compared to 123,000 men.

However the proportion of men and women with heart attacks rises dramatically between 45 and 64, with over half a million per year. Over 420,000 men a year in this age group have heart attacks. The incidence amongst women increases – women have one heart attack for every three men in this age group. Over the age of 65, the number of men suffering heart attacks only increases slightly. However there is a huge increase in the number of women with heart attacks – they comprise over 40% of all victims.

In conclusion, men are more likely to be the victims of heart attacks at all ages, but women are increasingly likely over the age of 65.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 760.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52380952381 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24110107171 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505952380952 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5078604694 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4444444444 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.13902439024 790% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24183232285 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146618685003 0.103423049105 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094186448474 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210467607817 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113000114106 0.0819641961636 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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