The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture illustrates the percentage of day doing different activities of maturities in one country between 1958 and 2008.
What stands out from the graph is that sleeping and working were the main activities of adult people in one day in both of the years. Whereas, the amount of time they spent on going out with friends or family decreased dramatically.
First of all, the percentage of working hours in 1958 was higher than other activities at 33%. Following that was the data of sleeping hours, 1% less than working hours. While, going out with friends or family only takes up 19%, equal about 1,7 with both above activities. 50 years later, adults tended to spend more time working with 42% in a day. By contrast, the rate of sleeping and going out with friends or family experienced a downward trend to respectively 25% and 6% in the last year.
Turning to the other three activities which adults did not use to do much of their time. The percentage of time they spent traveling to work and relaxing at home rose considerably from 2% and 8% to 8% and 13% respectively. Meanwhile, the figure for other activities like hobbies or playing sports stay the same throughout the period shown.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 173, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
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Line 4, column 60, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, whereas, while, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74162679426 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57667830335 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593301435407 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.0385949985 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.0909090909 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210057405303 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851493289325 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812818012346 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155976497467 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804560127681 0.0819641961636 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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